The Invasion
My name is George and I'm 11 years old. On the 6th June 2020 my life changed forever. It was a cloudy, misty day and my best friend Zac and I were kicking a ball around on the beach. And suddenly, we heard a hovering sound, and looked up in amazement. We saw the most unbelievable spacecraft ever. Zac and I quickly raced as fast as we could into our secert treehouse hideaway in the sand dunes, watching as about 20 mysterious aliens disembarked from the spacecraft. Their heads were as big as pumpkins, they were speaking a funny language and their eyes were bulging out. They were carrying big, weird boxes with unusual writing on them that I had never seen before.
The aliens needed a place to stay so they invaded my beach house probably because it was the biggest and best house on the coast, but it didn't look like my were just going to invade my beach house. In the sky there were millions of spacecrafts looking to invade any of the best houses there were. All the alien spacecrafts were hovering down to all the houses on the coast. Zac and I shivered together in fear and we were just hoping they wouldn't see, hear or find us.
The aliens didn't care who was in the house, they just wanted a place to stay and store their boxes. Zac and I were watching all of this from my secert treehouse, and they opened a box up and there were these weird weapons, well thats what I thought they were, but Zac thought they were a odd type of bazooka that aliens wound use. They a couple of the aliens took the weapon in and aimed it when they were going in and we were shocked when we saw the aliens threaten my parents with strange looking weapons. I almost felt like running out and punching them all in the face and suddenly a couple of the aliens took my parents aboard their spacecraft with thier high tech weapons, while the rest of the aliens stayed behind and loaded more boxes into my beach house. Why my beach house?
This is what I've done so far for my Story. Don't worry, I'll do some soon!!!
George Power 1000
Hi Happyblobmonster here
ReplyDeleteI like how it is very exciting and good. Your punctuaion was good except for weapones where you just need to take out the e.Also "just hoping they would see" hear or find us make was wasn't.
Thanks!!!
ReplyDeleteI'll make the correctings